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Work Samples
To demonstrate what we can do for you, we’ve posted a few
“before and after” samples from previous writing and editing
projects.
Sample #1
Before:
In today’s noisy stressful world, you are plugged into
your cell phones, pagers, computers and laptops, and its time to
unwind, stop the worry, and plug into something relaxing,
beneficial and fun.
Our harmonic music is just the remedy!
After:
In today’s stressful world where
people are plugged into their cell phones and laptops, it’s good
to be able to tune out the noise, stress, and worry and plug
into something relaxing and fun.
Our music brings back the harmony in life.
Sample #2
Before:
For all of Your
Telecom needs, XYZ Company provide a bundled Package that
includes Unlimited Phone Lines, Unlimited long Distance and a
State of the Art VOIP Hosted Phone System – for a low flat
monthly rate.
After: For a low
monthly fee, XYZ Company meets all your telecom needs with our
state-of-the-art VOIP system featuring a No-Limits package of
unlimited phone lines and unlimited long distance calling.
Sample #3
Before:
Come exercise with us in our new
environmentally-friendly studio.
Our new studio features a full size garage door that
opens to mountain views and fresh air, and our upbeat music will
get your body and mind in gear.
We offer both invigorating yoga classes for all levels
and spin workouts set to resounding music.
After:
Exercise with us in our new “green” studio with its
soaring ceilings and a western wall that opens directly to
fabulous views of the mountains.
By inviting the outdoors in, we add fresh air and
sunshine to all our fitness routines.
We offer energizing spin rides set to resonating music
and invigorating yoga for all experience levels.
Sample #4
Before:
Both contractors and compressors manufacturers, especially the
ones lacking a dominant market share, represents significant
growth opportunities for the Company.
After:
Both contractors and compressor manufacturers, especially
those lacking dominant market share, represent significant
growth opportunities for the company.
Sample #5
Before:
We own and run the most selective range of cars available in Italy, from Rolls Royce to Mercedes,
Jaguar, Alvis, Lancia, Bentley, Austin Healey, etc.
We pride ourselves to provide a level of service to our
guest adequate to the excellence of the marques we offer.
After:
(Re-write based upon
company materials):
Our company provides self-driven individual tours
anywhere in
Italy
for the discerning classic car enthusiast. Now you can enjoy the ride, too.
Whether it is a Lancia or a Rolls Royce you prefer, we
put you in the
driver’s seat. Italy is yours—and we take care of
all the details.
Sample #6
Before:
Healthcare and Life Sciences
organizations are facing similar challenge of rising cost of
patient care and clinical research.
After:
Healthcare
and life sciences organizations are facing similar challenges
with the rising costs of patient care and clinical research.
Sample #7
Before:
XYZ Printing Company is
more than the tpical printer.
We can be your partner in final proofing and editing of
your marketing materials, and such things as policies and
procedures and company manuals.
Our writers will also help you compose these.
You can cuont on us!
After:
XYZ Printing Company is more than a typical printer.
We partner with you to edit and proofread your marketing
and other company materials, such as policies and procedures
manuals. Our writers can
also help you compose your documents.
You can count on us!
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