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Work Samples 

To demonstrate what we can do for you, we’ve posted a few “before and after” samples from previous writing and editing projects.

Sample #1

Before:  In today’s noisy stressful world, you are plugged into your cell phones, pagers, computers and laptops, and its time to unwind, stop the worry, and plug into something relaxing, beneficial and fun.  Our harmonic music is just the remedy!

After:  In today’s stressful world where people are plugged into their cell phones and laptops, it’s good to be able to tune out the noise, stress, and worry and plug into something relaxing and fun.  Our music brings back the harmony in life.

Sample #2

Before:
   For all of Your Telecom needs, XYZ Company provide a bundled Package that includes Unlimited Phone Lines, Unlimited long Distance and a State of the Art VOIP Hosted Phone System – for a low flat monthly rate.

After:   For a low monthly fee, XYZ Company meets all your telecom needs with our state-of-the-art VOIP system featuring a No-Limits package of unlimited phone lines and unlimited long distance calling. 

Sample #3

Before:  Come exercise with us in our new environmentally-friendly studio.  Our new studio features a full size garage door that opens to mountain views and fresh air, and our upbeat music will get your body and mind in gear.  We offer both invigorating yoga classes for all levels and spin workouts set to resounding music.

After:  Exercise with us in our new “green” studio with its soaring ceilings and a western wall that opens directly to fabulous views of the mountains.  By inviting the outdoors in, we add fresh air and sunshine to all our fitness routines.  We offer energizing spin rides set to resonating music and invigorating yoga for all experience levels.

Sample #4

Before:  Both contractors and compressors manufacturers, especially the ones lacking a dominant market share, represents significant growth opportunities for the Company. 

After:  Both contractors and compressor manufacturers, especially those lacking dominant market share, represent significant growth opportunities for the company. 

Sample #5

Before:  We own and run the most selective range of cars available in Italy, from Rolls Royce to Mercedes, Jaguar, Alvis, Lancia, Bentley, Austin Healey, etc.  We pride ourselves to provide a level of service to our guest adequate to the excellence of the marques we offer.

After:  (This re-write is based upon company materials.)  Our company provides self-driven individual tours anywhere in Italy for the discerning classic car enthusiast. Now you can enjoy the ride, too.  Whether it is a Lancia or a Rolls Royce you prefer, we put you in the driver’s seat.  Italy is yours—and we take care of all the details. 

Sample #6

Before:  Healthcare and Life Sciences organizations are facing similar challenge of rising cost of patient care and clinical research.

After:  Healthcare and life sciences organizations are facing similar challenges with the rising costs of patient care and clinical research.

Sample #7

Before:  XYZ Printing Company is more than the tpical printer.  We can be your partner in final proofing and editing of your marketing materials, and such things as policies and procedures and company manuals.  Our writers will also help you compose these.  You can cuont on us!

After:  
XYZ Printing Company is more than a typical printer.  We partner with you to edit and proofread your marketing and other company materials, such as policies and procedures manuals.  Our writers can also help you compose your documents.  You can count on us!